Your professor is teaching a class, write a post responding to the professor's question. In your response, you should do the following. ·Express and support your opinion. ·Make a contribution to the discussion in your own words. An effective response will contain at least 100 words. Doctor Achebe： Next, we'll be discussing the future of higher education, focusing on proposals for making postsecondary education (education after high school) more efficient and more accessible. One such proposal is to make class attendance optional. For instance, under an optional-attendance policy, university students could choose not to attend classes but instead study the course materials and acquire the knowledge on their own time. Their grade would then be based entirely on exams or papers. What are your thoughts on this approach?
Claire： I like the idea of optional attendance. University students have a lot going on, and sometimes it's difficult to make it to class. As long as students are held accountable for the information they're supposed to learn, I don't see why they should have to attend every class session, especially for classes that meet multiple times a week.
Andrew： I have to disagree with Claire. I think that class attendance policies foster another important kind of accountability. They teach discipline and responsibility. Many of the jobs that university or trade school students will pursue after graduation have their own attendance policies, so students should see class attendance as good preparation for entering the workforce.
TEST TAKER'S RESPONSE.
I find myself in agreement with Claire's viewpoint, and I firmly believe that students should have the freedom to decide their attandence (attendence), as this can help students (them) to better organize their schedules.
To be more specific, arranging time is one of the most important skills that should be mastered, considering that nowadays companies are more willing to recruit students who are capable of dealing with complicated tasks in a short period.
For instance, students may have other important assignments to finish, such as doing internships (and) doing part-time jobs and so on. If the university forces them to stay in the classroom, they may lose many valuable opportunities and do (may) not be that competitive.
Still, some would claim that students cannot learn better without attending lectures. Nevertheless, they still have necessary reading materials that can definitely help those students (them) to solve this problem.
RATER'S COMMENTS. 25 SCORE.
You show a good understanding of the discussion task presented in the task however, there are still grammar errors.
In a formal essay like this, avoid using ‘and so on’ because it shows that you are not certain of what to say next. It means you are telling the reader to find out more of what you want to present. Avoid poor diction, when the subject is already stated in the first clause of the sentence, use the pronoun to refer to it in the second clause of the same sentence. Spelling errors are the least expected at this level of writing.
The structure is good though you can also use one paragraph. The introductory paragraph, main body and concession paragraph are well developed and linked. The cohesion is good in most parts. The essay is well organized.
The subject matter is relevant, you have stated your stand in the first paragraph in relation to the discussion task. Your views and explanations are good and convincing.
You only need to avoid grammar errors, and use more lexical resources. The structure and subject matter are good.