Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
TEST TAKER'S RESPONSE.
It is quite common for many people to work for a variety of organizations. Opinions are divided on how their choice affects their lives and society. I believe that people's experience in different companies can help them to find more opportunities and widen their horizons.
On the one hand, there has been a concern that frequent job changes may affect a person's life quality. This is because many organizations are located in different areas, which means those changing jobs have to make a move constantly. It is not convenient for a family with kids or pets. What's (What is) worse, moving leads people to adapt to new work and life environment instead of enjoying the familiar places. While those who work for the same organization do not need to worry about such problems, so they have better job security and their life is more stable. This explains why many people prefer to work in one place all their working life.
On the other hand, advocates of varying in work believe that they have (it has) such a significant influence on their happiness. When an individual leaves a company for another one, he or she can taste the difference between different careers, which will be beneficial for finding what they really love. Moreover, it is a chance for them to try something new. For example, they can make friends with new colleagues, improve their abilities in various areas, and travel to some countries they never knew before. As a result, they can increase the feeling of freshness and keep cheerful in daily life, instead of staying in the same place for long life.
Personally, my view is that while the drawbacks of changing work may cause some trouble and instability in their life, this is usually easy to overcome. The happiness from working for different organizations, in the long term, will play a significant role in improving their (peoples’) passion for both work as well as life.
This is a good response to the topic though you can even make it better than this. Structure: The structure is standard because you developed an introduction, main body and conclusion. You however need to space the paragraphs more for better organization. Tap the space tab on the keyboard twice after each paragraph to create enough space between them. Subject matter: The introduction is well developed. However, it only looks at one side of the topic, that is, working for sundry companies. How I wish you also talked of the other side of the topic too. "It is quite common for many people to work for a variety of organizations, though sundry others would prefer working for the same company for years on end." With this you can see that the two important aspects of the topic are talked about. The discussion in the main body is good. You have presented good and relevant views. The explanations are good. There are no examples though. The conclusion is well stated. Language usage: I commend you for the language usage. These simple errors can be rectified if you carefully read through the essay before submission. Avoid contractions in a formal essay because some have more than one meaning. There are some good sentence structures. Cohesion and lexical resources: The cohesion is basically good. The paragraphs are well linked. The linkage of ideas in the main body is good. You need to use some more lexical resources. In all, a good presentation in terms of structure and subject matter though you needed to space the paragraphs more. Avoid the simple grammar errors.