You should write at least two main body paragraphs that support the thesis. Many test takers find it hard to develop a coherent main body paragraph. Below is an example, though not imperative in terms of word count.

You should write at least two main body paragraphs that support the thesis.

• Sentence One: A Topic Sentence

“First off, studying hard at school enhances one’s understanding of both the theory and practical knowledge required for success in one’s future career.”

In the above sentence, I talk of “understanding of theory and practical knowledge”.  This means that in the main body, I am going to explain how understanding theory and practical knowledge is important in one’s success. So this is the main idea presented in the topic sentence.

• Sentences Two and Three: The Explanation

“At work, being deft in what one is doing evokes efficiency and effectiveness, leading to success. Usually, not all fellow workers will want one to succeed and thus might not be helpful, but indent to drag one down the drain of failure, but with good career knowledge, success is guaranteed even when workmates intend to fail you.”

• Sentence Four and five: The Transition and Personal Example

“My father is a vivid example of success because of studying hard at school. While at work, not all workmates liked him, and some would accord him wrong advice in a bid to fail him. However, my father was steady fast in using his knowledge learnt at school to enhance his effectiveness and efficiency. He negated wrong advice and stuck to what is right. In the end, he was promoted to a managerial level at his company. Hard it not been the good knowledge, his relationship with workmates was devoid of good advice and knowledge.”

Your paragraph will be:

“First off, studying hard at school enhances one’s understanding of theory and practical knowledge required in one’s future career. At work, being deft evokes efficiency and effectiveness. Not all fellow workers will want one to succeed and thus might not be helpful, but drag one down the drain of failure. With good career knowledge, success is guaranteed even when workmates intend to fail you. My father is a vivid example of success because of studying hard at school. At work, not all workmates liked him, some according him wrong advice. However, he was steady fast in using his knowledge learnt at school to enhance his effectiveness and efficiency. He negated wrong advice and, in the end, he was promoted to a managerial level at his company. Had it not been the good knowledge, his relationship with workmates was devoid of good advice and knowledge.”

The second main body paragraph should follow the same setting. However, in this, you can either continue supporting your stand or discuss the other side of the task, that is, how relating well with people at work can lead to success.

“Nonetheless, good interpersonal relationship can evoke practical knowledge that might not have been attain at school even with hard study. On many occasions, knowledge at school is theoretical and sometimes what is required with some careers is practical knowledge that is accumulated through experience. In this way, relating well with workmates can help one succeed at work. My elder brother, a car mechanic is a valuable example. At school he was never so apt and thus his grades were not appealing. However, when he joined a motor company near our home as a mechanic, he was in good terms with almost all his workmates. Their practical knowledge and instrumental advice aided his learning auto mechanic ardently, thus becoming an auto-mechanic erudite."

The two main body paragraphs would then be:

“First off, studying hard at school enhances one’s understanding of theory and practical knowledge required in one’s future career. At work, being deft evokes efficiency and effectiveness. Not all fellow workers will want one to succeed and thus might not be helpful, but drag one down the drain of failure. With good career knowledge, success is guaranteed even when workmates intend to fail you. My father is a vivid example of success because of studying hard at school. At work, not all workmates liked him, some according him wrong advice. However, he was steady fast in using his knowledge learnt at school to enhance his effectiveness and efficiency. He negated wrong advice and, in the end, he was promoted to a managerial level at his company. Had it not been the good knowledge, his relationship with workmates was devoid of good advice and knowledge.

Nonetheless, good interpersonal relationship can evoke practical knowledge that might not have been attain at school even with hard study. On many occasions, knowledge at school is theoretical and sometimes what is required with some careers is practical knowledge that is accumulated through experience. In this way, relating well with workmates can help one succeed at work. My elder brother, a car mechanic is a valuable example. At school he was never so apt and thus his grades were not appealing. However, when he joined a motor company near our home as a mechanic, he was in good terms with almost all his workmates. Their practical knowledge and instrumental advice aided his learning auto mechanic ardently, thus becoming an auto-mechanic erudite.”

There are a few things to keep in mind as you write the body paragraphs:

• Use a mix of simple, compound and complex sentences.

• Emphasize the examples.  They are easy to write, so they should make up a big chunk of each body paragraph. 

• Avoid very short sentences and very long sentences if you are not sure of how to connect ideas within.

• Never use coordinating conjunctions to start sentences in a formal essay, this is affixed rule.

• Use a variety of discourse phrases (therefore, moreover, as a result, in addition, etc).

• Try to use advanced link words or phrases at the beginning of the paragraphs.

• Do not use contractions in a formal essay because some have more than one meaning. This might confuse the reader. For example, “it’s” can mean “it is” or “it has”.

NB;

The above is just an example to show you the best way of arranging the main body paragraphs. The words might be many for an IELTS response but the format or structure is the same.

Try developing the main body of the following topic in the comments area for correction.

Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.