The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
TEST TAKER'S RESPONSE.
The table compares the data about the underground subway systems in six different urban cities worldwide.It is clear that London was the earliest city to ran a railway system and own the longest route in kilometres among the cities given. However, Tokyo occupies by far the most number of passengers per year. London is the only one that constructed an underground transport as railway system before the twenty century, in 1863. In the following century after 81 years span, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC and Kyoto constructed the railway service one after another, with the exception of Los Angeles that started using the tube in 2001. London, with the earliest route of 400 km, roughly doubles the figure of the second established railway in Paris. Tokyo and Washington DC have almost similar extent, reaching 155 km of the former and 126 km of the latter. Kyoto built the shortest railway track, showing merely 11 km, while the figure for Los Angeles witnesses just a slightly longer length, with 28km. By contrast, Tokyo receives the highest quantity of passengers as the information given, recording 1927 million people, and Paris reports the second largest number, with 1191 millions. London, however, experiences fare numbers less than half of the figure of Tokyo, while Washington DC remains the fourth ranking in the three categories of date, kilometres and number of passengers on the table. Kyoto and Los Angeles serve negligible numbers of customer.
This is very good but there is need to look at a few issues to make it better. I do commend you for the language used. You made one simple errors. There are good sentence structures and some good vocabulary though more can be used. As for the subject matter, the introduction is good because you have hinted on the data presented well. In the main body, the description of the data is good though some parts required you to be specific about the figures given so as to make a better comparison of the data. For example, “London, however, experiences fare numbers less than half of the figure of Tokyo, while Washington DC remains the fourth ranking in the three categories of date, kilometres and number of passengers on the table. Kyoto and Los Angeles serve negligible numbers of customer.”. It is better to state the figures of Washington too for better comparison of the data. In the second and third main body paragraphs, the comparison of the data is good and understandable. You should have done the same for the last paragraph. The structure is good. You developed an introduction, main body and conclusion. The cohesion is good. There is good transition between paragraphs. In all, just make more extraction of the data for the last paragraph. The structure and language usage are good.